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From: d6b@psuecl.bitnet
Newsgroups: comp.sys.amiga
Subject: Re: Amiga Educational Ads
Message-ID: <1990Sep13.221538.20614@psuecl.bitnet>
Date: 14 Sep 90 02:15:36 GMT
References: <9009121727.AA19635@terra.oscs.montana.edu>
Organization: Engineering Computer Lab, Pennsylvania State University
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In article <9009121727.AA19635@terra.oscs.montana.edu>, uphwk@TERRA.OSCS.MONTANA.EDU (Bill Kinnersley) writes:
> As I said, the latest round is a big improvement, but IMHO could be more
> effective if they were simplified even further.

Well, it's none of my business, but I thought the ads were fine, maybe
even great. Not perfect, perhaps, but much better than the sickely ads
that Apple puts out (marketeers take note: college students don't want
to read stupid sentence fragments!!!)
Just remove the, misplaced, commas, and it would be perfect...

-- Dan Babcock