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From: ofut@gatech.UUCP (Jeff Offutt)
Newsgroups: net.flame
Subject: Re: Let's keep English simple.
Message-ID: <2676@gatech.UUCP>
Date: Tue, 6-Dec-83 15:22:44 EST
Article-I.D.: gatech.2676
Posted: Tue Dec  6 15:22:44 1983
Date-Received: Fri, 9-Dec-83 04:58:12 EST
Organization: Georgia Tech School of ICS, Atlanta
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jj:      If such cannot be done in 25 lines, then a 25 line article is
	 not appropriate to the subject, and will represent only a waste
	 of the writer's and readers' time.

fmc:     If item won't fit in 25 lines, then forcing it wastes writer's & readers' time.

All right, this is getting silly.  The first paragraph was certainly
rather long and verbose. It was also written in the passive form which
makes reading harder.  The second was vastly overdone and did indeed
look to much like a "C" program for my tastes. While pyuxqq!fmc 
certainly had a point, so did rabbit!jj with his response.

Let's balance it in the middle with a 31 to 22 word reduction in
an active voice:
	
     If an item won't fit in 25 lines, then forcing it to fit 
     will waste both the readers' and the writer's time.
-- 
Jeff Offutt
School of ICS, Georgia Tech, Atlanta GA
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