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From: hxe@rayssd.UUCP
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Subject: Re: Jason's "Gay Satire"
Message-ID: <568@rayssd.UUCP>
Date: Thu, 15-Nov-84 12:12:21 EST
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Posted: Thu Nov 15 12:12:21 1984
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Well, *I* found it offensive because it was poorly written.  It
was obvious what effect Jason was after but, as far as I'm con-
cerned, he failed.  The "satire" just seemed to be not quite in
tune with the times.  Because the satire of his writing failed,
it called more attention than was obviously intended to the ac-
tual subject matter.  If this was your first attempt, Jason, keep
it up, but first read a little more Art Buchwald and Dave Barry
(to whom your friend compared your writing) to find out why their
stuff is funny.  I will give you the same advice I give myself and
everyone else who is a writer: find an editor.  You simply cannot
critique your own writing with an objective eye, and your friends
can't either.

Anyway, I *think* that's why I didn't like it!

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--Heather Emanuel {allegra, decvax!brunix, linus, ccice5} rayssd!hxe
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